composition-changes in me
【题目】
写一篇以前你是什么样子的，现在的你是什么样子的短文。 可以用以下提示词，不少于5句话。
(quiet, active, short, tall, thin, strong, go cycling, ice-skate,...) 一、审题：
以前——一般过去时（过去式） 现在——一般现在时（原形）
以前：before, 3 years ago, then, at that time 现在：now
二、选择标题。Changes in me Then and Now Before and Now 列表
过去和现在对比，一一对应。
可以从外貌、性格、能力、爱好等方面作对比。 列3点最佳。 三、写作
1、分3段。总——分——总。
如果通篇只有一段，看得阅卷老师眼睛累，增加阅卷负担，会影响作文分数哦～
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每段前面空2个字母。 2、注重开头。
开头用适当的、高级的句子放在开头，起到一鸣惊人的效果。给阅卷老师一个震撼：嗯，这个人英语很不错嘛～
3、注重结尾。
开头和结尾，是阅卷老师非常注重的部分。
有个漂亮的开头，再加上一个漂亮的结尾，再次给予阅卷老师一个震撼：这孩子，英语果然很不错呢！给高分！一定给高分！
4、注意字迹工整、卷面整洁。
（1）字不能太小，不然增加阅卷老师的阅卷难度。你给他们找麻烦，他们也会给你找麻烦哦——扣分！
字也不能太大。不然就不美观，整体看起来会很凌乱。 （2）字迹一定要工整，不能涂涂改改、影响整体效果。
改作文的阅卷老师改一篇英语作文不会十秒。看标题、开头、结尾，中间扫一眼，打分。
如果没发现错误，加上你的字迹工整、卷面整洁，恭喜你，你至少能拿8分哦～
（3）单词中间不能涂改。 单词也不能转行。
（4）如果你涂涂改改——ohno，这个人写作文吞吞吐吐，自己都没想好自己说什么，英语肯定不会很好。扣分！扣分！
关于字迹工整。
有句话叫做：“字如其人。”阅卷老师大都是这样想的。
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你连英语字母都写不好，成绩肯定不会好到哪里去。扣分扣分！如果你字迹工整、卷面整洁，就算发现了一些错误，阅卷老师也可能会心情好得放过你：一定是考试太紧张了，没关系没关系，字这么好看，少扣点分！
如果真实水平是6分的作文，字不好看，可能只得到3分；如果字好看，说不定能得8分呢！
如果真是水平是8分的作文，字好看，10分送给你送给你；如果字不好看，哎呀，给个6分就算了。
三、易错句型。 1. Now, I very strong. 2. Well, I was short. 3. Now, I very like winter. 4. Now, I like ice-skate. 5. I'm taller then before.
6. Now, I am tall and strong than before. 7. Before, I was quiet. Now, I active in the class. 8. Now, I am every active in class.
9. Before, I was quiet. Now, I am active in the class. I'm tallerthan before. I always talk with joy.
10. Before, i didn't like winter. Because, it was too cold. 11. Hello, I'm Amy. I 13 years old. 12.因果倒置
Before, I didn't like winter. So, I couldn't go cycling. Now, I lovewinter, so I can go ice-skating.
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13. didn't和couldn't用法混乱
二者都表示否定。couldn't表示不能，没有能力。didn't表示不，有能力但是不愿意做。
Before, I was short. I didn't go cycling. Before, I couldn't like winter. 14.逻辑混乱。
Before, I could play badminton. Now, I can't play badminton.Before, I was active. Now, I'm quiet. I always talk with joy.
15. be动词乱用。
Hello, I'm Amy. I 13 years old. Before, I short. Now, I tall. Before, I was short. Now, I was tall.
Before, I'm couldn't go cycling.Now, I'm can ride a bike.be动词用法： (1)是
(2)be＋形容词(…的) (3)be＋动ing
(4)be going to+动原(表将来) 不能加be动词的情况。
(1)动词原形。l'm like to go ice-skating. (2)动词过去式。I'm rode a horse last weekend. 四、开头
1. Hi, everyone. I'm Amy. I'm 12 years old.
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I'm different now. 2.Changes are around me. 3.Changes are with me.
4. Everything is changing. Me too! 五、中间。 （一）外貌对比
1.（身高）Before, I was short. Now, I'm taller than before. 2.（体重）Before, I was thin. Now, I'm stronger than before.
3.（身高＋体重）Before, I was short and thin. Now, I'm taller andstronger than before.
4.（头发）Before, I had short hair. Now, I have long hair. 5.（眼镜）Before, I didn't wear glasses. but now, I wear glasses. 二、性格对比
quiet-active, shy-funny, strict-friendly/funny,
（not）hard-working at school, (not) helpful at
home/school(1)Before,Iwasquiet.Now,I'mveryactiveinclass.Ialwaystalk with joy.
(2) Once I wasn'tan active girl. I didn't talk a lot. Now, I talk more than before. I always talk with joy. 过去、现在写一句也可以。写你不会写错的。 三、能力对比(couldn't/ can+动原)
1. Before, I couldn't go cycling. Now, I can ride a bike. I ride a bike every day.
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(I like it very much.) (I'm good at riding a bike.) go cycling= ride a bike ice-skate = go ice-skating
(球类)play badminton(乐器类)play the piano do sports= play sports
clean my room= do the cleaning wash my clothes cookdo kung fu make a snowman swim =go swimming 四、爱好对比 didn't like/ like+动ing +to +动原
liked/ don't like+动ing +to +动原
1. Before, I didn't like winter. I thought it was too cold, and Icouldn't go cycling. Now I like to ice-skate, so I like winter. (spring, summer, autumn, winter) 2. (music, sports, English, maths)
Before, I didn't like music. Because it was too hard(困难). Now, Ican play the piano. So I like music very much.
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五、tips
1、可以把外貌、性格、能力、爱好相结合，写作更出彩。 2、高级词汇、高级句子可以为你的作文增加光彩。
3、但是，如果你不确定写地对不对，还是改用一般的词汇、一般的句子吧。
因为错词、错句会扣分，而且很严重。 4、过去和现在对比，以三个为宜。 如果句子足够多，两个也可以。
5、写作一般不少于5句话。不多于10句话。
6、不要通篇都是Before,...Now,... Before,...Now,... Before,...Now,...写作并不是造句子。
7、表示过去，可以用before, then, at that time, 3 years ago时间可以放句首，也可以放句末。
放句首，需要加逗号，放句末则不需要。 六、范文(一) Changes in me
Hello, everyone. I'm Amy. I'm different now.
3 years ago, I was short and thin. I couldn't ride a bike.
Now,I'mtallerandstrongerthanbefore.SoIcancycling.Ilikeitvery much.
What a big change! Then and Now
Everything is changing. Me too!
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Before, I had short hair. But now, I have long hair. Once I wasn'tan active girl. I didn't talk a lot. Now, I talk more than before. Ialways talk with joy.
Changes are with me. Before and Now
Hi, myname is Mike. Changes are with me.
3 years ago, I didn't wear glasses. I was quiet in class. At thattime, I didn't like music. I thought it was too hard(难).
Butnow,Iwearglasses.AndI'mveryactiveinclass.Ilikemusic very much, because I can play the piano.
I'm different now. What about you?
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