七分范文） Some people believe that studying at
university or college is the best route to a successful career ， while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Whenthey finish school ， teenagers face the dilemma that whether to get a job or continue their education. While there are some benefits to getting a job straight after school ， I would argue that it is better to go to college or university.
The option to start work straight after school is attractive for
several reasons. Many young people want to start earning moneyas soon as possible. In this way， they can become independent ， and they will be able to afford their own house or start a family. In terms of their career ，
young people who decide to find work ， rather than continue their
studies ， may progress more quickly. They will have the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession. This may lead to promotions and a successful career. On the other hand， I believe that it is more ben eficial for
students to continue their studies. Firstly ， academic qualificati ons are required in many pro fessi ons. For exa mple, it is imp ossible to become a doctor or lawyer without hav ing the releva nt
teacher
degree. As a result ,
uni versity graduates have access to more and better job opportunities ， and they tend to earn higher salaries than those with fewer qualifications.
Secondly， the job market
is becoming increasingly competitive ，and sometimes there are hun dreds of app lica nts for one p ositi on in a company.
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Young people who do not have qualificati ons from a uni versity or college will not be able to comp ete.
For the reasons mentioned above ， it seems to me that students are more likely to be successful in their careers if they continue their studies bey ond school level.
以上就是这篇雅思写作 7分范文的全部内容，字数足够。这 篇雅思写作范文所占的观点是应该在大学继续学习， 但是对另外 的观点也做了相应的论述，所用的篇章结构的语法结构都值得大 家借鉴。
Band 5
Some people thi nk that uni versities should provide graduates with the kno wledge and skills n eeded in the workplace. Others thi nk that the true fun cti on of a uni versity should be to give access to kno wledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, i n your opinion, should be the main fun cti on of a uni versity?
What kno wledge and skills should uni versities provide has bee n argued for many years. Some people think that the true fun cti on of uni versities provide kno wledge for their own purpose, but no wadays, more and more people point out that uni versities should p rovide graduates with the kno wledge and skills accord ing to the
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workplace.
The first reas on for uni versities should provide these kno wledge and skill is the stude nts ' n eeds. Obviously, the most of the stude nts go to uni versity purpose of is to get some kno wledge and skills which could make them have the ability to get a job. If a uni versity does not provide these kno wledge and skills, the stude nts might not get a job and they would be very disa ppoin ted. As a result, the uni versity would lose its stude nts.
Moreover, provid ing kno wiedge and skills n eeded in the workplace makes a uni versity progress. The new skills and in formatio n always are in itiated in the workplace, so focus ing on the n eeds of the workplace the uni versity could get sound strategies to do research and make it more moder ni zati on.
Lastly, provid ing these kno wledge and skills could ben efit our country which usually gives a finan cial support to uni versities. Having these kno wledge and skills, stude nts
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are more easy to get a job, and this can make our coun tries ' economy strong.
In con clusi on, it can be said that provid ing the kno wledge and skills which the workplace n eeds is every uni versity fun cti on.
's basic
只能拿到5分的原因: 一、这个题
中有两方的观点:
some 及
others的，很明显这位考生在后面的论证过 程中完全忽
视了 others的观点，都在一味地 论证some的观点的正确性，于是考官给出 的评语是：it does not address all p
arts of the questi on.
写作建议 NO・3 : Do not neglect any part, or you will
regret your mark.
不要忽视任何东西，否则你的分数会让你很 伤心。 二、这位考生在连接词和复杂句型上都表现 得不错，可是他太偷懒了，
kno wledge and skill这个词组一共用了
9次，这种高频率的
rep etition让这位考生付出了比较惨重的代 价，所以看
者希望你们能够汲取这样的教 训，多注意Para phrase的
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练习。尤其是常 考的考试主题所可能涉及到的高频单词更 是要做好 homework. knowledge and skill 是多多准备才对，如
就
属于top 3的高频考题的教育类，所以这类 的词汇一定
exp ertise,
con versa nee, in structi on, com pete nee, ap titude, tech ni que, p rowess, dexterity 都 可以拿来替换这两个
词。
写作建议 NO・4 : Paraphrase helps you parachute into a
higher band.
改写能助你拿到高分。
Band 6
Some people thi nk that a sense of competiti on in childre n should be en couraged. Others believe that childre n who are taught to co-op erate rather tha n compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, purpose of educati on being cha nged in Korea. There are some people who thi nk that competiti on in childre n should be made, also others believe that childre n who are taught to co-operate as well as become more
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useful adults. There are adva ntages and disadva ntages for both of the argume nts.
To beg in with, what is good if a sense of competiti on in childre n is made? They could develop themselves more and more as they lear n and study a lot to win from the competiti on. To prove this, i n Korea, it is popular- eve n comm on now- to have a tutor who come to student ' s house to teach extra p ieces of study with paying a lot of mon ey.
They lear n faster tha n what they lear n at school. Furthermore, duri ng the vocati ons, stude nts study abroad to lear n En glish for a
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month in stead of revise school work. If they have experime nts such as study abroad, it is one of the greatest plus point to go to the famous well-k nown high school. Moreover, there are four big school exam and two n ati onal exam in ati ons to test stude nt s' level of studies. Gen erally, only the highest 40% can go to the good quality highschools and colleges childre n lear n as much as they can, to win the com petiti on to obta in good quality schools.
On the other hand, as they are busy to en ter the schools and study in dividually with their own tutors, there are problems. They become selfish. They become careless and don ' t help others a lot if it is about studies. There will be no co-operati ons for them. The n, why are there compa nies for many people to work in? each of them are clever, however, there are weak parts and stro ng p arts for each p ers on. To co-op erate is to imp rove this part. People talk and liste n to what others thinking of and lear n. That could also be a great opport unity to lear n in stead of lear ning alone with one teacher. In con elusi on, I str on gly agree with that ehildre n
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should be taught to co-op erate rather than com pete. Nobody is p erfect. P eople lear n together, work together to develop each other. therefore, I want pare nts and teachers to educate childre n concen trat ing on co-op erati on, not com pete and ranking them.
问题分析:
从论证大主题的角度来说，
这一篇的最后的
收尾是co-operation更重要的成立的，但是 这位考生在文字数量分配上缺乏规划， 给competition的文字明显多于给
co-operation的，这样就给了考官一个非常 合情合理的借
分配
口扣分，实在是遗憾啊
！
写作建议 NO・5 : If it is your preferenee, give it more
refere nee.
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如果你更认同那个观点，那就在这个观点 多写点吧。 如果我们进一步看下 Body段里的细节内 容，其实这位考生的语法功力和逻辑论证能 力比上面那位5分同学还要差，但是这篇文 章把题目中
的两个方
NO.3建议中的错误。除此之外，文字总量 上这面都提
一篇文章叫上两篇都有绝对的优势， 以再强调到，没有下数量真的也很重要。
犯我的
写作建议 NO・6 : A quantitative change causes a
qualitative cha nge.
量变带来质变。
Some people say that the government should not put money on building theatres and sp orts stadiums. They should sp end more money on medical care and education.
Do you agree or disagree?
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Much discussion concerning allocation of resources assumes that the government should sp end money on medicine and education rather than on theatres and sp orts stadiums. In my opinion, this issue should be examined from the angle of whether the investment benefits the great majority of the popu lation.
The institutions of medical care and education,
undoubtedly, should receive p riority in the thought of millions of children from dep rived backgrounds who now get a substandard education, and who would require a relatively high quality of education if they are to enjoy anything app roaching equality of opp ortunity in later life. Another p ressing need of
society is imp rovement of medical care for the adult poor, for the aged, and so forth down the list.
allocation of a government
's expenditures, at the
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Theatres and sp orts stadiums are institutions for pro moting human culture. A successful theatrical event is an exciting and stimulating exp erience,
whether it occurs in a grand theatre or a high school auditorium. Sp ectators as well as those involved in the p roduction feel this excitement. Sp orts stadiums, on the other hand, attract millions of sp ectators to watch p rofessionals play every year.
Many more millions watch games on television, read about them in news pap ers, and discuss them with their friends. Therefore, can we say that these are unnecessary p ublic exp enditures the government should ignore?
In conclusion, today man is becoming ever more aware of his sp iritual needs. Medicine and
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education are needs that we recognize, but are contacts with theatrical or sports events also basic needs?(250 words)
Some people believe that students who want to go to university after graduation from high school
should have about one year
's time to get a job to
obtain work exp erience or have a travel to enlarge their vision.
Do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?
High school students who intend to study at
university should attend tertiary education after graduation. To sp end one year acquire work exp erience or to travel for broadening one ' s vision is, to my mind, a 's time doing a jobo
waste of time and energy.
First, university education is the continuation of high school education for those students who want to pu rsue their learning at an advanced level. A break of one year from academic study will
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p robably weaken one 's memory of what has been
learned, esp ecially for those who will study such theoretical subjects as mathematics, p hysics or chemistry.
Besides, many nations have established one examination that all students must p ass to qualify for admission to a university. For exa mpl e, in China there is a college entrance examination. Anyone who fails in the examination will be denied of admission into a university.
Furthermore, one year
s work or travel does not
hel p students much in their academic studies at university because it is unp redictable for one exp erience to be integrated into one sp ecific subjects, to say nothing of traveling exp erience. Even if some subjects, such as MBA, require
students to have work exp erience, one year ' s work
'esstudi experience, however, is not sufficient to meet the requirements of
three or five years, and one ' svork experience should, after all, be related to management.
's work
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To conclude, I would rather suggest that university ' s curriculum allow the integration of
academic study with p ractical training for the comp ensation for students exp enence.(250 words)
lack of work
It is suggested that all the young adults should un
dertake a p eriod of unp aid work helping people in the com mun ity. Does it bring more ben efits or drawbacks to the com mun ity and the young people?
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In moder n societies, it is in creas in gly popu lar that young people volun teer on weeke nds in the local com mun ity service cen ter to help the people in n eed. If all the youn gsters do it in a regular way, the ben efits are obvious to both the com mun ity and these young adults although there are some minor drawbacks as well.
It can be argued that the adva ntages of doing unp aid com mun ity service are
eno rmous. In deed, whe n an old person feels sick, the volun teers could offer first aid before the doctor or the ambula nee arrives. Likewise, if a disabled person has difficulty doing some daily activities such as sho pping, the assista nee from young volun teers is in dis pen sable. Moreover, as far as the young people are concern ed, they could devel op the sense of respon sibility, i ndependence as well as interpersonal skills in the p rocess of hel ping others in the n eighborhood. In this
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way, people may live in harm ony in the com mun ity. Nevertheless, the dow nsides of volun teer com mun ity service are worth men ti oning. In fact, i n the city like Shan ghai, an in creas ing nu mber of graduates find it harder to make a liv ing on their own. Thus, if all of the young adults are required to do full-time unp aid job in a fixed p eriod, some of them would have no in come source, which is un realistic to these youn gsters .In additi on, it is believed that com mun ity service could p ossibly take up their time of acquiri ng kno wledge.
Therefore, comp ared with the merits of volun teer com mun ity service offered by the young adults, the demerits of that are just a few but cannot be overlooked.
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